तू मेरा तू है.
न मेरे तू से मैं हू,
न मेरे मै से तू है .
प्रथ द्रष्टया तो तू औ' मैं ,
प्रथम वाकया भी तू औ' मैं.
पर हर अगली द्वितीय पे,
मेरे मैं और तेरे तू का लोप हो रहा है.
और ऐसा ही परस्पर चलता रहा तो
एक दिन न तू रहेगा, न मै.
हम की ओर अग्रसर
ये मै औ' तू की चिरौरी
जानती नहीं की ये अपने
अस्तित्व के लिए कितनी भयावह है.....
फिर, कसी दिन 'हम'
समवेद ,सहचर,समाज,
नीरसता की चौखट पे
मैं औ' तू के धीमे उच्श्वासो को टटोलते'
उनके पुनर्जन्म की बाट जोहते,
मैडीक्लेम के कागज खंगालते'
बहुतेरी कोशिशे कर रहे होंगे
मैं औ' तू को हम से अलग करने की....
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Although there were a couple of words I didn't fully understand, the over all theme is quite clear and well communicated.
ReplyDeleteThis is probably just how I understood it, (which might be quite distant from what you wrote, but bear with me):
the first few lines (which are absolutely brilliant from a pro-Objectivist point of view): न मेरे तू से मैं हूँ, न मेरे मैं से तू. This is brilliant for two reasons: 1) It objectively disconnects the existence of the speaker and the listener -- they are independent and equal, and 2) because the statement is rooted in the necessary subjectivity of the mind -- if it had been न तेरे तू से मैं हूँ, न मेरे तू से तू it would have acknowledged an external objective perspective; but no, it works from within the subjectivity which perpetually binds us.
The odd thing about this line is how it conflicts with the later tone of the poem. While the former declares disconnection as an ontological tenet, the latter laments the loneliness in lackluster satire. Perhaps this duality and self-contradiction was by design, reflecting the self-defeating purpose of human ambition and strife? Maybe.
Still, one of your better ones.
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ReplyDeletenow now now...Nanti bade sitting alone in Bhopal strikes again.....after the fulltooo positive postmortem of your lines by Terry...I also have somethings to say about the above lines....firstly I must say that this time you are more elloborate...more matured kind of writing....which u always do.... and I personally liked the first 10 lines....after that it's gone flat...waiting to read more from your mind....
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